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Posted 28.04.11 in Writing

‘Tarmac’ by Ankita Saxena

Sparks crack stars, black
as aardvark abysses, and
art. Arcs trap brash BMWs,
as drag wasps snarl at fast,
craft flaws. Warmth gnaws
at catalysts, snaps at cars’
last mark: Saharan strata
drafts. Crash-clad, A5
bawls at shanty byways, all
caravans and hay carts.
Lazy rays gray; a flash day.
Cars halt at last, as stray
stars fly, and fall, far away.

 

Ankita Saxena wrote her poem ‘Tarmac’ in response to Ross Sutherland’s Univocal Challenge.

Ross Sutherland says: So much great imagery coiled up inside this poem. The gridlocked motorway comes across so powerfully. Plus, the density of the description gives the whole thing this wonderful Ballardian quality. The skid-marks on the road described as a “car’s last mark: Saharan strata drafts”. I love this idea of the road transforming itself into a poem: “black/ as…art”.

Comments (4)

4 Responses to “‘Tarmac’ by Ankita Saxena”

  1. Ankita Saxena says:

    Thank you very much for your comments, and this exercise was challenging but at the same time very interesting and rewarding. I find that putting myself in tight constraints really helps break the writer’s block, and it helps me face a blank page, so it is definitely something I will do more of in the future! Once again, thank you for all your efforts, and this wonderful workshop, and I am very pleased that you enjoyed my poem!

  2. The Wig says:

    Hello Ankita! :)

    I phrasing of ‘aadvark abysses’ is quite fantastic! :D

  3. Ankita Saxena says:

    Hello :) Thank you very much!

  4. Küstenpatent Kroatien says:

    Thank you very much for your comments, and this exercise was challenging but at the same time very interesting and rewarding. I find that putting myself in tight constraints really helps break the writer’s block, and it helps me face a blank page, so it is definitely something I will do more of in the future! Once again, thank you for all your efforts, and this wonderful workshop, and I am very pleased that you enjoyed my poem!