August Writing Challenge 7: Hollywood Remake poem.

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We are challenging you to write your own mini anthology of poems this August! To help you, every two days poet Jon Stone will set a new challenge on the Young Poets Network site to spark off a new poem.

Challenge 7. Hollywood Remake poem.

Update an old poem by changing all the nouns to modern variants.

Jon’s example of a Hollywood Remake Poem:

 The Rickenbacker Mutters
after John Clare

The Rickenbacker mutters louder and more loud;
With quicker motion the drummer plies the sticks;
Ready to burst, slow sails the pitch black chord
And all the band a bigger racket make
To sit beneath – the bassist’s fingers awake
The pulse so large. Wet all thro’ in an hour
A tiny spark runs down the leaning frontman
In the sweet stagelight, yet dry the doormen cower,
And some beneath the dress circle shun the encore.

The orginal poem which John Stone remade was “The Thunder Mutters” by the Romantic poet John Clare (1793 – 1864). “The Thunder Mutters” is about hay-making, Jon has transmutted the poem into one about a performance on a Rickenbacker guitar.

The Thunder Mutters

The thunder mutters louder and more loud
With quicker motion hay folks ply the rake
Ready to burst slow sails the pitch black cloud
And all the gang a bigger haycock make
To sit beneath – the woodland winds awake
The drops so large wet all through in an hour
A tiney flood runs down the leaning rake
In the sweet hay yet dry the hay folks cower
And some beneath the wagon shun the shower

Submitting your poem

Jon has now chosen his favourite responses to the Hollywood Remake challenge, but you can still use his workshop to spark a new poem and send to one of the opportunities on our Poetry Opportunitites Page! Have a read of these poems for inspiration:

Aldrin, in a white vessel among stars by Oluwaseun Matiluko

Recession by Miriam Connors

Stop the Traffic Lights by Rachel Glass


Jon Stone

Jon Stone was born in Derby and currently lives in Whitechapel, London. He is co-creator of the multi-format arts journal Fuselit and micro-anthology publishers Sidekick Books. He won a Society of Authors Eric Gregory Award in 2012 and his collection, School of Forgery (Salt, 2012) is a Poetry Book Society Summer Recommendation. He works as a court transcript editor.

Published August, 2012

4 thoughts on “August Writing Challenge 7: Hollywood Remake poem.

  1. Should all nouns be changed, whether or not they are in Old English? And what defines “modern”? Could any word that we use today be a substitute?

    1. It’s at your discretion which nouns your include and how you subsitute them, that’s how you’ll make this into your own poem.

    1. Hi Heather,
      The challenge is to substitute the nouns from the old poem with new nouns. You can change the poem to have a completely different theme, like Jon has, but if you want to stick to the rules of the challenge then it’s nouns-to-nouns.
      Of course if this sparks off other ideas for poems which vary on this theme of substitution then that’s great!

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